How I Think Essay: Feedback Reflection

October  19, 2018

In GHEnglish I wrote a piece on my Cognitive Map(How I Think). After submission, Mr. Heidt gave us evaluative feedback on my writing. I agree completely with his response. I have strong paragraphs, each of them is developed well and fit the essay. In each of these paragraphs I used vivid images, that convey my way of thinking. While my paragraphs are solid the connections  and flow between them are not. I had recognized that my essay did not flow well, but I was unsure as to how. Mr Heidt called the sentencing “herky jerky,” which I agree with. I had noticed this after revision with a peer. I am not a string enough writer to know how to fix this, but I do want to go back and revise. I think that revision is important to the writing process even after you have completely finished a piece. Nothing is ever final. My plan is to gain the skill to improve my flow at the upcoming writing workshop. After this I want to go back and revise my essay for the flow issues between my paragraphs and ideas.